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GanonDX Member
| Subject: Rate these Lyrics Wed Jun 16, 2010 6:09 pm | |
| Alright first of all, I'm thinking about joining a band (the members are friends of mine and they need a singer) as a singer and maybe later on a guitarist. For as far as I know, this band only does covers of other songs but I'm pretty sure they're willing to make their own songs too.
So, beforehand, I decided to write some lyrics about something that's related to recent events in my life (which are actually still going on now).
I drew inspiration from Disturbed and Godsmack and the song is called Stalker (for now).
Anyway, here's the lyrics, please rate them:
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Tell me what you want or just leave me alone It's nothing but a taunt your destruction I will hone
I don't know what to believe I don't know who I can trust What are you trying to achieve deception seems to be a must
[chorus] You're nothing but a stalker why would you do this thing? Are you some kind of monster just give up I won't start running!
I've got no idea who you are I don't even know your face Do you wish to start a war? just show up and I will embrace!
[chorus] You're nothing but a stalker why would you do this thing? Are you some kind of monster just give up I won't start running!
just give up it's not worth trying! just give up I'm not running! the day you fall I will be laughing!
Do you wish, to frighten me? You're just a bitch there's something that you'll never see!
I'm not afraid of your pathetic games It's time you prayed before you burn in flames
[chorus] You're nothing but a stalker why would you do this thing? Are you some kind of monster just give up I won't start running!
You're nothing but a stalker just give up I won't stop breathing! Are you some kind of monster? just give up I won't be running Who are you, you mother fucker? when you fall I will be laughing!
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Perhaps this thread can be turned into a lyrics rating thread for other people's lyrics, I'm certainly willing to rate yours. |
| | | Ravage_Gokan Member
| Subject: Re: Rate these Lyrics Wed Jun 16, 2010 10:03 pm | |
| Pretty nice in my opinion. I think I'd give it like 7.5/10. |
| | | GanonDX Member
| Subject: Re: Rate these Lyrics Thu Jun 17, 2010 9:10 am | |
| Awesome, anything specific you think should be changed or added(or removed)? |
| | | Ravage_Gokan Member
| Subject: Re: Rate these Lyrics Thu Jun 17, 2010 6:23 pm | |
| Just more to it. Like another verse or two, more specifically in the middle of the song, where there's one verse and then the chorus repeats. |
| | | GanonDX Member
| Subject: Re: Rate these Lyrics Thu Jun 17, 2010 7:03 pm | |
| Alright, I'll try to think of something. |
| | | Ravage_Gokan Member
| Subject: Re: Rate these Lyrics Thu Jun 17, 2010 7:40 pm | |
| Don't just change it because of me though. If you like it as it is, and thinks it gets the point across, then leave it, alright buddy? |
| | | Bob Member
| Subject: Re: Rate these Lyrics Thu Jun 17, 2010 8:06 pm | |
| - Ravage_Gokan wrote:
- Don't just change it because of me though. If you like it as it is, and thinks it gets the point across, then leave it, alright buddy?
I agree. The most important thing is that you and the band liked it, then you'll pass that felling to the public. I have a band too and we'd be very happy just if somebody make some lyrics, don't matter if it's bad or not. Composition is a very hard work. |
| | | Sasuke-Ish Member
| Subject: Re: Rate these Lyrics Tue Jun 29, 2010 1:47 am | |
| It's nine o' clock on a Saturday the regular crowd shuffles in There's an old man sitting next to me Makin' love to his tonic and gin. He says, "Son can you play me a memory? I'm not really sure how it goes, But it's sad and it's sweet and I knew it complete When I wore a younger man's clothes"
La la la de de da La la de de da da da Sing us a song you're the piano man, Sing us a song tonight. Well, we're all in the mood for a melody. And you've got us feelin' alright.
Now John at the bar is a friend of mine He gets me my drinks for free And he's quick with a joke Or to light up a smoke but there's someplace that he'd rather be. He says "Bill, I believe this is killing me," As a smile ran away from his face. "Well I'm sure that I could be a movie star If I could get out of this place."
La la la de de da La la de de da da da
Now Paul is a real-estate novelist, Who never had time for a wife. And he’s talking with Davy Who's still in the navy and probably will be for life. And the waitress is practicing politics As the businessmen slowly get stoned Yes they're sharing a drink they call loneliness But it's better than drinking alone.
Sing us a song, you're the piano man, Sing us a song tonight. Well we're all in the mood for a melody. And you've got us feelin' alright.
It's a pretty good crowd for a Saturday, and the manager gives me a smile. 'Cause he knows that it's me they've been coming to see. To forget about life for a while. And the piano sounds like a carnival And the microphone smells like a beer. And they sit at the bar and put bread in my jar And say "Man what are you doin' here?"
La la la de de da La la de de da da da Sing us a song you're the piano man, Sing us a song tonight. Well, we're all in the mood for a melody. And you've got us feelin' alright. |
| | | Ravage_Gokan Member
| Subject: Re: Rate these Lyrics Tue Jun 29, 2010 1:54 am | |
| Billy Joel For the Win Ish. I love you even more. |
| | | Sasuke-Ish Member
| Subject: Re: Rate these Lyrics Wed Jun 30, 2010 12:34 am | |
| Here is another just soothing classic.
Day after day, I'm more confused Yet I look for the light through the pourin' rain You know that's a game that I hate to loose And I'm feelin' the strain Ain't it a shame
Oh, give me the beat boys and free my soul I wanna get lost in your rock n roll And drift away Oh, give me the beat boys and free my soul I wanna get lost in your rock n roll And drift away
Beginnin' to think that I'm wastin' time I don't understand the things I do The world outside looks so unkind Now I'm countin' on you To carry me through
Oh, give me the beat boys and free my soul I wanna get lost in your rock n roll And drift away Yea, give me the beat boys and free my soul I wanna get lost in your rock n roll And drift away
And when my mind is free You know a melody can move me And when I'm feelin' blue The guitar's comin' through To soothe me
Thanks for the joy that you've given me I want you to know I believe in your song And rhythm and rhyme and harmony You help me along Makin' me strong
Oh, give me the beat boys and free my soul I wanna get lost in your rock n roll And drift away Give me the beat boys and free my soul I wanna get lost in your rock n roll And drift away
Oh-ho, ah-no Give me the beat boys and free my soul I wanna get lost in your rock n roll And drift away
Hey, hey, hey, yeah Give me the beat boys and free my soul I wanna get lost in your rock n roll And drift away
Na, Na, now won't ya Won't ya take me Oh-ha, take me |
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